Revision
Students will be able to negotiate differences in and act on with intention feedback from readers when drafting, revising, and editing their writing
This outcome was one that wasn't in practice as much as the other. Revising and editing is obviously an ongoing process, but opportunities to act on others feedback was scarce. A few instances done over the semester can seen in my revised bibliography, taking into account feedback from the professor. As well as the bibliography, I edited my final research paper with some feedback from a peer in clas.
Revised
Bibliography
After completing my Annotated Bibliography, I received some feedback from YOU :). There are a few highlighted sections through out my revised version that address the bottom two comments, but the main source of improvement in the paper is in the addition of another source about rhetoric, the suggestion seen as the top comment. I found another source concerning oral rhetoric, or rhetoric when speaking which directly applies to what I was trying to research (how storytelling in teaching might change the rhetoric seen). By adding another source, as the comment says, I think my introduction fit together a more smoothly, and ties rhetoric to the actual topic of interest of storytelling.
Peer Review
For each major assignment, the annotated bibliography, research paper, and ePortfolio, we did a peer review session on a rough draft before turning in the final product. When peer reviewing, we would trade papers with two others, and leave specific comments, as well as an overview of some of the major pieces that are both good and the the pieces that need to be fixed. Below is one such overview on my rough draft of my research paper. In it, he mentions that my discussion section is lacking a claim, making it "a little confusing". This section was definitely lacking on my initial run through, and was a section that was heavily edited once all was said and done. This comment was something that I used as a launch point to expand on what I initially had, seen especially in the final sentence of the opening paragraph circled in red. This was my attempt to clearly state my claim as to what the research I gathered meant.
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